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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. mmmburgers

    mmmburgers Elite Member

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    Snew: Make the N look like the other letters, it looks whack
    ESKids: your shit is whack, try simples...
    GETRAD: work on your letter structure
    Zase: that S is FIRE, keep it up. i like, i like
    Stussy: keep working on them simps, your getting there.
    Inkme: Straight bars, keep em straight. and make em a little bit fatter too.

    Theres my Crits for today. Sorry if i'm being harsh but hey, its the truth alright?

    ANYWAYS, heres something that i threw together. its probbaly going on my next canvas
    you guys are probbaly gonna say "go back to simples!" "your letter structuce is whack"
    BUT OH WELL, FUCK YOU!!!!!! I DO SKETCH SIMPLES ON A DAILY BASIS!!!!
    (Oh btw, it says Maloe for those who cant see the letters)

    ai237.photobucket.com_albums_ff286_mmmburgers_ksetch.jpg
    Crits please?
     
  2. I GOT CLOUT

    I GOT CLOUT Elite Member

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    Zase - The only thing I would try to work with on the throw is the Z. The Z and A on the bottom are legit.
    Ink - Try thickening up your bars. It works wonders. Also try straights.
    Rayz - Just draw it a whole shit ton. Itll straighten up soon enough.
    GetRad - I dont know..The colors are definately making the letters feel lost.
    Esk - Try something simpler? or just post smaller pictures.
    Snew - The N just looks like a pigs ass. But really though, Try keeping your letters on a straight line with each other. The handie is hurting too. Just keep working at it man.

    okay
    ai10.photobucket.com_albums_a103_DeciMatioN_graf.jpg

    Burgers - I think it looks way too convoluted. I dont want to say make it simpler but...
     
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  3. Darkeist

    Darkeist Elite Member

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    dekae those are fucking fresh
     
  4. NO_1

    NO_1 Senior Member

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    burgers_ cant see the letters
    dekae- sick name and those simps are clean as fuck

    havent posted ina while.
    should i go back to simps?
    ROZ!!
    ai8.photobucket.com_albums_a2_fender336_sickassblacknwhite.jpg
    ai8.photobucket.com_albums_a2_fender336_coleredrozpeice.jpg
    ai8.photobucket.com_albums_a2_fender336_f4263e25.jpg
     
  5. mtown

    mtown Banned

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  6. Bink1

    Bink1 Elite Member

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  7. South-Pole

    South-Pole Elite Member

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  8. mmmburgers

    mmmburgers Elite Member

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    ai237.photobucket.com_albums_ff286_mmmburgers_THEEREEEEEE.jpg
    there, for those of you who cant see the letters
    okay NOW you guys are probbaly just gonna say "BURGERS YOUR LETTER STRUCTURE IS WHACK!!!!! GO BACK TO SIMPLES NOW!!!!" well hey! i DO sketch simples okay? heres my attempt at something thats NOT simples.
     
  9. downunder

    downunder Senior Member

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    That would probs look a shitton better if you got rid of all the unnecesary extensions, and brought the letters closer together..
     
  10. TastySesamcrew

    TastySesamcrew Senior Member

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  11. Zase

    Zase Senior Member

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    lol yeah i spelled it like a T but it was quick hahaha and i had no place for a dot
     
  12. Zase

    Zase Senior Member

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    maloe let me try helping you if ya want it more complicated
    the bars of the letters (the letters themselv) add like stuff on it and little not too much chips and pipes and all
    BUT place it on the good place
    like to clear up dead space
    and chips for like a better look on the 3d's u know what im trying to say is
    make ur letters wild and not ur piece wild
    so u get a wilder piece that has no 'stuff' just poppin out of everywere
     
  13. JETPACK!!

    JETPACK!! Banned

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    maloe. the structure is good. but a lot of the extensions are placed in stupid spots which hide your letters. letters are aiight, just work on the extensions an place em better. dont make the extensions the same width as the bars of your letters.. that's what throws cats off.
     
  14. balance42020

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    im gonna try to help zane with his 3d...
    ai127.photobucket.com_albums_p127_dannymanmancanman_bad3dzane.jpg
    see how the lines from your 3d dont all intercept at a point? theyre going all over theplace, they are in the right direction but not quite if you know what im saying.
    ai127.photobucket.com_albums_p127_dannymanmancanman_zaneue7.jpg
    on this picture with black i made all the lines go to the same place, and i circled where you should change your lines, i did this quick but i think it might help you if you understand what im saying
     
  15. NoCanControl

    NoCanControl Elite Member

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    sweeet dood. that top is the dopes imo. i think you got everything right. looks legit. anddddddd yer exchange is a few pages back. sorry i didn't color it...

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  16. -Wings-

    -Wings- Senior Member

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    mmmburgers > theres no flow in this piece seems like the letters are to skinny and all over the place.
    I got clout > These are good keep working with them and you'll pieces will look good. (good flow aswell)
    no 1 > I cant say im huge fan of this style, it does look OKAY. But I think the way your putting letters or your overall structure could use some work, also try not to does as wild as that.
    zane > your 3d is a bite wrong, that z bar on the very top left you could do without. Remember you dont see simple Z's with those random bars :)!
    bink1 > Seems to wiggly you should make your letters more striaght, and curbish on edges. It looks alot better.
    south pole > This style seems to have alot of potentional. I dont like the extentions underneath it though, you might want to lose that. Also dont be afriad to over lap your letters and the letters dont always have to be exactley straight just the same hieght as eachother if you get that.
    tasty > I dont really like the stuff above the chick, but under that the stuff looks on point :)!

    Now that ive gaven crits to everyone on the page, ill be expecting them back people. (Crits 4 Crits!)
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  17. mtown

    mtown Banned

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    thanks danny these are nice crits.
    deni:ziet er goed uit man super fris.
    wings:NO ARROWS.
    southpole:nice simp.
    bink1:Make the letters straigh or a bit bend.
    snew:n don't fit.
    eskid:the same as i said for bink
    maloe:i don't now what to crit i think it looks nice

    crits4crits guys so crit'em
     
  18. -Wings-

    -Wings- Senior Member

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    I think the arrow on the K is quite fine. And Ive been using arrows for a while now. Maybe its just this piece that it came out bad.
     
  19. kroc_oner

    kroc_oner Elite Member

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    i dunno but thats a nice s imo
     
  20. TastySesamcrew

    TastySesamcrew Senior Member

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    Skin I think you've made too many additions on the left side of your piece but otherwise its dope