little battle with safeway, i hate my N in this: flat L looks better, T is still pretty weird looking centry those look pretty sweet, not loving the H in the 2nd one, but the fill is definately on point and your letters arent bad norf, fill is sweet, super clean sketch, not a huge fan of the NC connection, makes it look like a weird M, and the top bar of the E should be connected to the left bar, it looks like a lowercase T to me. the whole thing kinda looks like YtM. props for the steez tho fruitful the letters need a lot of work, you gotta use bars and i would lose the extensions and such for now
my first piece...crits please fruitfulanomie - work on your letter structure, i like the colors scheme and background you did though flat - I really like that one but i would take out the extension from the L
Ian- That "N" is all wonky with all the different bar sizes, thicken it out to fit in with the other letters. I can't say that I'm feeling the middle bar for the "A" either and it seems to be tilted a bit too much into the "R". Nah- I like it. The middle bar of the A seems a bit too slanted and the little add-on on top isn't really needed. You already touched on the 3D for "one", so that's all I really have to say. Delyte- I think you should beef up your letters more, keep them the same size and simplify them. Scam- Nice one man, I like it. I think it would look better if the right bar of the "M" was the same thickness as the others, but that's just me. Need markers so I can make cleaner lines and all that jazz.
the lbur part is great. but you need to watch your bar widths in the w and i. u got ok strcucture for straights. i think it would look better if your 2 middle bars in the w only peaked at half its height
Yeah, I wasn't feeling the bars that much either. I know the middle of the "W" is wonky and I think that my "I" should be thicker. Time to fix 'er up, thanks man.
fry use only bars(rectangles) to make up this exact letter structure: FRY And don't use multiple strokes for one line even if its sloppy, practice for a steady hand. fill up pads of paper with that until your wrist dislocates
Humr- I like it for the most part, I'm not too sure about the left leg of the "M", though. Messed up on the "B" and I think I put the "I" too far behind the "W".
Really? Aha, I'm just using a fine tip Sharpie. I actually wanted to get a different, thicker marker. It's the only marker I have left until I cop some more.
^yo the trick to line cleanliness is thickening. You can use a microtip or a fine tip or even a regular pen and then after you draw a line, you draw the same line next to it then fill in the space between the two lines, all it is is making the line thicker. It helps in overall appearance, makes your lines look straight if you got a shaky hand, and makes it so you can fix some outlining errors if you make any yeahp, its pretty common sense. unless you can draw free hand foot long straight lines and perfect circles than line thickening is the way to do it. But if your gonna thicken ines you gotta make sure the thickness is consistent or else it will look bad you never have tried using a micro tip to outline? It takes more time, but it will prolly help you... It don't mean stop tryin to freehand ish without thickening tho cause if you can get that down it will help when you have stezy pens to use woah holy shit almost half a page with no pics... guess i have to cut into the bag of old gems... I dont think i posted this 1 before... but uh its one of those ones where i came back to it a couple days later after doin the first 2 letters...R dont really fit in it... and the H is all kinds of fucked, especially the bottom left .....but uh crit if you please View attachment 603475
lopid2 - work on your letter structure, use bars to create the letters and stick with straight letters for now. Once you are good at that then you can start bending the bars.
crits to all... bars are your best friend :] [Broken External Image]:http://a8.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/36080_485318688474_676038474_6904866_5083034_n.jpg did this for a home girl recently says ELEENA, crits? [Broken External Image]:http://hphotos-ash4.fbcdn.net/209280_10150205753798475_676038474_8447021_2773752_o.jpg did this for a friend... the I sucks I know but I had only a pen lol and didnt wanna redo it.. I'm lazy crits?
The first one looks like it has no structure at all. I'm not sure what the second one says and I'm not too fond of how the style was executed. Start simple.