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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. kweezy

    kweezy Member

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    Any constructive crits?

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  2. ian

    ian Elite Member

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    whipped this guy out for the round robin:

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    @kweezy, not bad, letters have structure for the most part, little extension on the F and E look bad, top right of the R is fucked up, the breaks and random circles are no good, and the pointy edges on the bootoms of letters also look bad

    @centry, other than the H and bar widths, lookin pretty good
     
  3. Dcicfhbimv

    Dcicfhbimv Senior Member

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    Haven't done much other than characters lately but figured I'd throw my crits in the ring and try and help you guys out .
    Kweezy-I really don't like the "R" it looks kinda wonky no offense it just doesn't feel right to me. And some of the extensions feel forced primarily the one on th "F" and the "R" I do like the Circles on the "A" and the "E" they are simple but different and add a little originality to the piece. All in all pretty good. thats my two cents.
    Ian- I really don't like the reaper himself just doesn't seem to ass to the word very much. You could add skeleltal hands and make the scythe line up. Or go old school and shroud his face in pure black. And a side Idea the extension the "R" you could've made that into a scythe's blade which would look pretty tight.
    Terf-Letters need phenominal amounts of work and they overlap way too much for their own good.
     
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  4. kuf

    kuf New Member

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    hey guys im new to the forum, heres the first thing i really tried can you give me feed back on how i can get better photo-32.jpg
     
  5. Kocka

    Kocka Member

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    same here as Dcicfhbimv said.


    terf: dont hide the F so much, piece looks incomplete that way. just bring it out a little more! graff isnt about hiding letters, its abotu showing them! sometimes in a kind of a hard way, but they should all be seen properly!

    kweezy: consistent with the bar widths, thats good! try combining other colors. and instead of leaving the inside of the letters plain white, do something interesting. just try stuff out and see if it works. practice makes perfect!
    also, the stuff going on at the bottom, isnt really happening for me. its got to have some kind of purpose :). it needs to add to the piece, not distract from it!

    kuf: keep the K simple man, its not really working.
     
  6. kuf

    kuf New Member

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    do my other letter look ok? if not what can i imrove on other then the k
     
  7. Dcicfhbimv

    Dcicfhbimv Senior Member

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    Try posting your pics in the way they are meant to be seen man. I'm getting a neck ache here. The "F" kinda looks like an "A" missing the right leg the "U" could pass as an "O"
    and I am really not feeling the bottom bar coming out of the "K" Start out writing in pencil softly KUF <- just like that, then adjust accordingly each letter should have equal representation Maybe give one more attention but if the sizes are inconsistant its hard to focus and even more difficult to read. Oh and arrows are a major cliche that and crowns. Try making up your own thing it can't be too bad. good luck man
     
  8. ChronicKush

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    Just a few. And just wanted to say kweezy is my gf. lol she needs the good crits

    i could use some too..

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  9. mindtrix350

    mindtrix350 Senior Member

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    No color. Not sure if I want to close the end of the "W".
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  10. StephenRL

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  11. nah!

    nah! Banned

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    no i don't like it
     
  12. Rezume_or_die

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    @chronic lookin good only thing i can say is loose the bottom extensions on the first 2, looks out of place, but mad good none the less,
    @ mind trix put some 3d and i think it'll bring it all together
     
  13. wackiwo

    wackiwo Member

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    I know its toy as fuck but advice?

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  14. Tempo718

    Tempo718 Elite Member

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    not even close 2 where i wana b. gota keep trying tho.
     
  15. Eclectic Boogaloo

    Eclectic Boogaloo Senior Member

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    reks fatten up the S and spread out the bottom bars of the K
     
  16. Phillip McDougall

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  17. Subconcious

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    @StephenRL - Keep consistent bar width. And the extra bits just look out of place, like an afterthought. I like the N and the colors.
    @Tempo - At least you're keeping it simple. Most people think they gotta go crazy wildstyle when they can't even get simples down. You're head's in the right place.

    Crits please.
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  18. Cobra716

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  19. TastyMcNasty

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    everyone on this page should go simpler imo...

    new stuff: crits always appreciated...
    (dont know what order theyre in)
    sowak; exchange for SO, over did the extensions (i was bored as hell)
    werm; exchange, rushed the 3D and background
    mind; oversized the first 3 letters >.>
     

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  20. jdub

    jdub Senior Member

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    tasty- gettin them bars down homie really feelin the S in the 2nd pic

    1st sketch in awhile
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